More Than What Glitters

[Todd]

The little man will often deign
to spin coarse straw in gilded braid,
and at the feet of vapid maid
the pyrite of his heart is laid.
But will she delve the hidden vein?

I am a queen without a crown.
Frogs are not due a lady’s word.
Your name itself is darkness slurred.
I see no debt that’s been incurred.
My first born son I’d rather drown.







(From one of the odd forms Brandon dredged up for our poetry chess games. I don't care if I have to change the form to improve the poem)

[popeye]

Thanks for the read Todd, enjoyed the Sleeping Beauty/Handsome Prince slant, I'm guessing that by vapid she is pretending to be disinterested? Cheers.

[Leanne]

I like the "I'm not playing your game sunshine" element to this -- and I also like that she's a vapid maid. She does get everything done for her, doesn't she? I've never really worked out the moral of that story, unless that it's ok to get everything you want as long as you've got someone standing by to help you break your promise at the end.

Your second stanza very nicely rebuts the first -- this is what happens when you play against someone of integrity, not a miller's daughter lying her way into a crown.

[popeye]

I like the "I'm not playing your game sunshine" element to this -- and I also like that she's a vapid maid. She does get everything done for her, doesn't she? I've never really worked out the moral of that story, unless that it's ok to get everything you want as long as you've got someone standing by to help you break your promise at the end.

Your second stanza very nicely rebuts the first -- this is what happens when you play against someone of integrity, not a miller's daughter lying her way into a crown.

Damn, mixed my fairy tales up again

[Leanne]

Pin the tail on the fairy can get tricky at times.

[Todd]

Thanks Popeye and Leanne,

Yeah pin the tail on the fairy can get tricky, and in fairness both have a spinning wheel.

I actually have one poem where I try to join them through the wheel, but its more short story than poem.

[popeye]

Cheers Todd, don't leave it in the closet to moulder, bring it out and give it an airing, sounds interesting, as one heads into second childhood one needs to brush up on one's fairy tails you know!

[Todd]

I'll see what I can do. Once it comes together enough I'll post it.