Reason

[rowens]

No reason, said the fly
To the spider,
To talk to anyone
That doesn’t already know
What
You’re going to say…

The spider coughed up a great block
Of gaseous ice he’d inhaled
On his daily trip over the newly installed
Freezer-Oven; he wasn’t listening.

A dog barked outside, and the fly thought
It might be an encoded message;
That the spirits of his egg-born children
May have possessed that large soft animal.

Later, after the poison began to clear from
The sticky fly’s brain, he found his wings free
And flew away;
While the spider sticks to the bottom your shoe.





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No reason, said the fly
To the spider,
To talk to anyone
That doesn’t already know
What
You’re going to say…

The spider coughed up a great block
Of gaseous ice he’d inhaled
On his daily trip over the newly installed
Freezer-Oven; he wasn’t listening.

A dog barked outside, and the fly thought
It might be an encoded message;
That the spirits of his egg-born children
May have possessed that large soft animal.

Later, after the poison began to clear from
The sticky fly’s brain, he found his wings free
And flew away;
While the spider stuck to the bottom of my blind brother’s shoe.



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I don't like the last line. But some others do. Some say it's a twist, but that's why I don't like it. For me it's not a twist, it's just something that happened in a world where all these insignificant characters are bumbling around, while a fly's talking on spider poison.

This is the kind of poem I write when I'm mad, and don't want to be taken too seriously. But then later I start to look at it as if I want to take it seriously. Because I was seriously mad.

[cidermaid]

Hi Rowens,
I find this entrancing. It has a dreamy almost surreal quality about it that somehow manages to be simultaniously solid and real.
I do agree with the last line it does let it down. Not that I have anything particularly better to offer Perhaps something linking the dog back in...(later, passing by, he saw the dog was coughing up the spider).

By the way I think the sub note is poetic...unless this was part of the original poem...in which case my appoligies..I do get confused easily!.
Need a little help....was this intentional? (If not it's still very good).
AJ

[rowens]

Hi Rowens,
I find this entrancing. It has a dreamy almost surreal quality about it that somehow manages to be simultaniously solid and real.
I do agree with the last line it does let it down. Not that I have anything particularly better to offer Perhaps something linking the dog back in...(later, passing by, he saw the dog was coughing up the spider).

By the way I think the sub note is poetic...unless this was part of the original poem...in which case my appoligies..I do get confused easily!.
Need a little help....was this intentional? (If not it's still very good).
AJ

I just felt that the last line was painfully obvious, so I stuck it on there out of spite against myself because I was in a bad mood. Then I went back and added the "blind" to make it more blatantly impulsive.

I'd planned on changing it, then I decided that I could read it out loud in such a way to make it work if I was ever in the mood for a dismissive tone.

Then I just didn't think about it for weeks.