Morning Star

[milo]

Morning Star


Jove grows restless now
and wanders through the garden
taking peace in all that he has made

as beetles dig beneath the ground
to find his face
in every outstretched eye of every tuber

and all along the path the leaves of figs
and dragon-fruit call out his name
in whispers caught by elephant ears

but what was it that Michael said 
when asked by Jove, Tell me a tale
and Michael told a tale of Gods:

A tale of Nymphs, frolicking at play,
and Titans - mighty in their strength,
of climbing Gods and falling Gods

and how they glowed in triumph
of how they reveled in the fray
and in the end of how they failed.

Jove was captured with delight
so he declared, I will be one of those
and you will disobey and quake with fear


and Michael sheepishly agreed
to call him God but after all
the elbow cannot disobey the ear

so Jove forgave and placed him
back upon the shelf
and hid his form behind the morning star

leaving him to wander by himself.
And somehow Jove has come upon the clay -
and here is man demanding to be made.

[busker]

I like the idea of a reimagining of the creation myth, of Yahweh being Jove and Michael being Lucifer. But I can’t understand Michael’s tale. The Olympians overthrew the Titans, so Jove wouldn’t need that story told. Unless this is a different universe, and the story worked out differently. At that point, this isn’t Jove. It’s all a little confusing and distracts from enjoying the lines.

Maybe the whole problem is Jove. A non Greek god, a Nigerian god, would do well.
I don’t think Jove-is-Allah packs that much of a punch.

[milo]

I like the idea of a reimagining of the creation myth, of Yahweh being Jove and Michael being Lucifer. But I can’t understand Michael’s tale. The Olympians overthrew the Titans, so Jove wouldn’t need that story told. Unless this is a different universe, and the story worked out differently. At that point, this isn’t Jove. It’s all a little confusing and distracts from enjoying the lines.

Maybe the whole problem is Jove. A non Greek god, a Nigerian god, would do well.
I don’t think Jove-is-Allah packs that much of a punch.

I did dedicate a whole line in the poem explaining that Michael is definitely not lucifer so I am not sure this is coming through.  My intent was never a Jove is Allah so perhaps that is part of the problem

Thanks for reading and commenting

[Mark A Becker]

Hi Milo -

Morning Star I think of Venus


Jove grows restless now I think of Jove as Jupiter
and wanders through the garden so, Jupiter is not in the sky?
taking peace in all that he has made so, Jove is the Roamn god, then?

as beetles dig beneath the ground
to find his face
in every outstretched eye of every tuber this very earthly imagery throws me

and all along the path the leaves of figs
and dragon-fruit call out his name back to Jove being god
in whispers caught by elephant ears

but what was it that Michael said hmm? where did Michael come from?
when asked by Jove, Tell me a tale
and Michael told a tale of Gods:

A tale of Nymphs, frolicking at play,
and Titans - mighty in their strength,
of climbing Gods and falling Gods

and how they glowed in triumph
of how they reveled in the fray
and in the end of how they failed.

Jove was captured with delight
so he declared, I will be one of those
and you will disobey and quake with fear


and Michael sheepishly agreed
to call him God but after all
the elbow cannot disobey the ear

so Jove forgave and placed him
back upon the shelf
and hid his form behind the morning star

leaving him to wander by himself.
And somehow Jove has come upon the clay -
and here is man demanding to be made.

I stopped in-line comments after becoming confused. I sense a poem about myths regarding God and creation, but wound up scratching my head. The poem made me feel like I needed to research creation myths; like I was missing something crucial to understanding what you're trying to convey.
All that said, I do like the final line. In one creation myth, God makes Man from clay, so how can Man already exist, demanding to take form; to be made? It's the lead-up to that line that leaves me feeling that the poem is a creation myth about creation myths.

[milo]

Hi Milo -

Morning Star I think of Venus


Jove grows restless now I think of Jove as Jupiter
and wanders through the garden so, Jupiter is not in the sky?
taking peace in all that he has made so, Jove is the Roamn god, then?

as beetles dig beneath the ground
to find his face
in every outstretched eye of every tuber  this very earthly imagery throws me

and all along the path the leaves of figs
and dragon-fruit call out his name back to Jove being god
in whispers caught by elephant ears

but what was it that Michael said hmm? where did Michael come from?
when asked by Jove, Tell me a tale
and Michael told a tale of Gods:

A tale of Nymphs, frolicking at play,
and Titans - mighty in their strength,
of climbing Gods and falling Gods

and how they glowed in triumph
of how they reveled in the fray
and in the end of how they failed.

Jove was captured with delight
so he declared, I will be one of those
and you will disobey and quake with fear


and Michael sheepishly agreed
to call him God but after all
the elbow cannot disobey the ear

so Jove forgave and placed him
back upon the shelf
and hid his form behind the morning star

leaving him to wander by himself.
And somehow Jove has come upon the clay -
and here is man demanding to be made.

I stopped in-line comments after becoming confused. I sense a poem about myths regarding God and creation, but wound up scratching my head. The poem made me feel like I needed to research creation myths; like I was missing something crucial to understanding what you're trying to convey.
All that said, I do like the final line. In one creation myth, God makes Man from clay, so how can Man already exist, demanding to take form; to be made? It's the lead-up to that line that leaves me feeling that the poem is a creation myth about creation myths.

Jove seems to throw a lot of people but it was initially just a term that meant "father god" or "main god" that was eventually applied to Jupiter who the Romans considered the main god.

Michael is the Christian Michael
Morning Star is another term for Lucifer

In this, Jove (god) is walking through the garden recalling a conversation he had with Michael before he comes to terms that Angels just won't do - hence the concept of man (demanding to be made) just as he happens upon the clay of creation

Thank you for reading and commenting