F*ck it all

[Jebus dinglberry]

Fuck it all!

I am afflicted, not disabled, difrently abled yet labled,
My experience leaving naught but disdain, 
For what constitutes the contingents of love and respect, 
Not of mine, Don't you dare think I'm the same,

Don't dare to be different, just stay in your lane,
And do as you're told all along,
The authorities know best, don't dare to contest,
We'll beat you till you say you're wrong,

What I'm getting at here is what's with the jeer,
And the cheers and laughter and song,
Surrounding the treatment of those who are different, 
Fuck your idles and rulers and god,

So I'm not like you, that much we've made clear,
Though who's to say which one's right and who's wrong,
Just let me live life less your bullshit and leers,
Ask yourself which of us hurts no one.

[whisperer]

Your command of language and structure is on great display here. I'm not sure if the rhyming scheme was on purpose, or if it's purposeful to make us wonder if it is. Either way well done! the piece flows nicely and has a very pointed and punchy meter, which fits well with the message. My only concerns is that the last line feels a little flat, and I apologize for not having a suggestion. I would also reconsider the title. It's a bit misleading and doesn't fit the message and amotion of the piece. Again, sorry I don't have any suggestions for that either.

[tun]

Fuck it all!


Well the thing is that I want the rhyming to be consistent.

I am afflicted, not disabled, difrently abled yet labled,
My experience leaving naught but disdain, 
For what constitutes the contingents of love and respect, 
Not of mine, Don't you dare think I'm the same,

Don't dare to be different, just stay in your lane,
And do as you're told all along,
The authorities know best, don't dare to contest,
We'll beat you till you say you're wrong,

What I'm getting at here is what's with the jeer,
And the cheers and laughter and song,
Surrounding the treatment of those who are different, 
Fuck your idles and rulers and gong

So I'm not like you, that much we've made clear,
Though who's to say which one's right and who's strong,  (to avoid repetition)
Just let me live life less your bullshit and leers,
Ask yourself which of us hurts and who's long.

[l.i.am]

Hello!

Interesting piece, I think you have a compelling message perhaps marred by a bit too direct language, particularly in the final stanza where it feels almost like I'm reading a private message rather than a poem, additionally in that it lacks any rhyme or clear meter. I found it a bit hard to follow the meter overall throughout, but that could also just be me not quite hearing the music, if it's there. I think you should revisit and try to tighten up the consistency, particularly when it comes to the amount of syllables/metrical feet present per line as it varies wildly enough to be jarring at least for me. Another suggestion is to give something visual for the speaker to hold onto, reading this kind of feels like I'm speaking into a well - just a simple thread to guide the speaker along the piece would do wonders.

[sun_sparks]

Fuck it all!

I am afflicted, not disabled, difrently abled yet labled, As a fellow person who is "difrently abled", I appreciated this opening line, while not necessarily agreeing with the language. "difrently abled yet labled" resonates strongly
My experience leaving naught but disdain, 
For what constitutes the contingents of love and respect, 
Not of mine, Don't you dare think I'm the same,

Don't dare to be different, just stay in your lane,
And do as you're told all along,
The authorities know best, don't dare to contest,
We'll beat you till you say you're wrong,

What I'm getting at here is what's with the jeer,
And the cheers and laughter and song,
Surrounding the treatment of those who are different, 
Fuck your idles and rulers and god, I really like the flow from this stanza to the next. Could you play with a comma here to help? "Fuck your idles and rulers and, God, / so I'm not like you" 

So I'm not like you, that much we've made clear,
Though who's to say which one's right and who's wrong,
Just let me live life less your bullshit and leers,
Ask yourself which of us hurts no one.

I like the message of this poem, but it lacks perhaps some specificity to make it real to those who haven't experienced these challenges. You have a gift for language - the line "the jeer, and the cheers and laughter and song" has a lovely meter to it. 

I'd suggest two things: 1. Look at the capitalization of each line and the commas at the end of each line. Sometimes these interrupt the flow. Commas work well when they slow down the reading. I know there's debate on first line capitalization that is above my experience level! 2. See what you can do about the last line - it falls flat. Your rhyming has been consistent throughout and the lack of rhyme here hurts the end and removes the impact.