To Scotland

[brynmawr1]

Dining on haggis
pleasurable breeze blowing
a hairy Monroe

https://images.app.goo.gl/PQGsFC41u5omXTrn7

[Tiger the Lion]

I dine on haggis
pleasurable breeze blowing
a hairy Monroe

After a little googling, I get a sort of "Trainspotting" vibe from this. I'm unsure if the first person compliments the form though.

[brynmawr1]

I dine on haggis
pleasurable breeze blowing
a hairy Monroe

After a little googling, I get a sort of "Trainspotting" vibe from this. I'm unsure if the first person compliments the form though.

Hi Tiger,

Unfortunately the last line is failing me.  Tried to force it a bit from a longer version that would likely have been better.  Thanks for stopping by
bryn

[Magpie]

Hi Bryn

I think it would work better with an instant image coz a lot of people may not follow the link. 
I'm presuming the joke is about the similarity of Munro to Monroe but for this to work you may have to spell it differently something like M'nro -- what do you think?
also what's a hairy Munro (hairy mountain)?

a bushy M'nro

or even

bush beaten M'nro

or something along those lines would cover bother options of Munro and Monroe

Dining on haggis
pleasurable breeze blowing
a bushy M'nro



I like what you've done here
cheeky play on words

[brynmawr1]

Hi Bryn

I think it would work better with an instant image coz a lot of people may not follow the link. 
I'm presuming the joke is about the similarity of Munro to Monroe but for this to work you may have to spell it differently something like M'nro -- what do you think?
also what's a hairy Munro (hairy mountain)?

a bushy M'nro

or even

bush beaten M'nro

or something along those lines would cover bother options of Munro and Monroe

Dining on haggis
pleasurable breeze blowing
a bushy M'nro



I like what you've done here
cheeky play on words

hi AR,
I like your version, although I didn't know about the mountain Munro.  So many coincidences!

Here's another version that is more literal 

Dining on haggis
pleasurable breeze blowing
her kilt a flapping

[Tiger the Lion]

Hi Bryn

I think it would work better with an instant image coz a lot of people may not follow the link. 
I'm presuming the joke is about the similarity of Munro to Monroe but for this to work you may have to spell it differently something like M'nro -- what do you think?
also what's a hairy Munro (hairy mountain)?

a bushy M'nro

or even

bush beaten M'nro

or something along those lines would cover bother options of Munro and Monroe

Dining on haggis
pleasurable breeze blowing
a bushy M'nro



I like what you've done here
cheeky play on words

hi AR,
I like your version, although I didn't know about the mountain Munro.  So many coincidences!

Here's another version that is more literal 

Dining on haggis
pleasurable breeze blowing
the kilt a flapping

mouth full of haggis
a cool breeze lifting his kilt-
he's no Marilyn 

this could go a million ways.

[brynmawr1]

The joke was supposed to be me as a hairy Marylin Monroe in a kilt but I didn't pull it off (not enough to get a look under). Started as a bit longer piece as part of a text message to my brother-in-law about whether I am available this sunday to play D&D with my nephews online. Turns out I will be in Scotland so I responded

I will be dining on haggis
a pleasurable breeze blowing
me a hairy Marylin Monroe

it went downhill from there. Now you know the rest of the story.

[Tiger the Lion]

The joke was supposed to be me as a hairy Marylin Monroe in a kilt but I didn't pull it off (not enough to get a look under).  Started as a bit longer piece as part of a text message to my brother-in-law about whether I am available this sunday to play D&D with my nephews online.  Turns out I will be in Scotland so I responded

I will be dining on haggis
a pleasurable breeze blowing
me a hairy Marylin Monroe

it went downhill from there.  Now you know the rest of the story.

Short poems are tough. Every word goes under the microscope. (as it should)  I'm sure your brother-in-law would get it. But, there's only so much room for detail, and one tiny detail the reader is not privy to can collapse the web. Even the masters only get it right half the time. I'm happy to nail one 10% of the time. 
P.S. When I googled hairy monroe I got an image of an upper-lip piercing on a hairy face. You can thank google in part for the derailment of your image.

Paul

[brynmawr1]

The joke was supposed to be me as a hairy Marylin Monroe in a kilt but I didn't pull it off (not enough to get a look under).  Started as a bit longer piece as part of a text message to my brother-in-law about whether I am available this sunday to play D&D with my nephews online.  Turns out I will be in Scotland so I responded

I will be dining on haggis
a pleasurable breeze blowing
me a hairy Marylin Monroe

it went downhill from there.  Now you know the rest of the story.

Short poems are tough. Every word goes under the microscope. (as it should)  I'm sure your brother-in-law would get it. But, there's only so much room for detail, and one tiny detail the reader is not privy to can collapse the web. Even the masters only get it right half the time. I'm happy to nail one 10% of the time. 
P.S. When I googled hairy monroe I got an image of an upper-lip piercing on a hairy face. You can thank google in part for the derailment of your image.

Paul

Hi Paul,
I knew that last line was a stretch, but I took the chance. Maybe "hairy Ms. Monroe" could've limped home.  Anytime someone needs google the poet has already lost. It was a fun exercise though.
Thanks to everyone for stopping by.
steve