12-07-2018, 12:43 PM
October (Haiku)
Snow-bright hunter’s moon
riddles black oak canopy:
luminescent tracks.
Snow-bright hunter’s moon
riddles black oak canopy:
luminescent tracks.
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October (Haiku)
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12-07-2018, 04:06 PM
like the middle line a lot.
12-07-2018, 10:15 PM
I like hunter/tracks. Strong image
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12-08-2018, 12:49 PM
classically structured, with the choice of colon over my favourite mark em dash more than appropriate.first line feels a little overloaded, though - snow and the title/moon are probably redundant as seasonal terms, while bright repeats snow. lovely with or without.
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