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I wrote a verse
then erased it.
Here it is.
Do you like it?
The silence? The purity of space?
The blather doesn't blah-blah
the space of what you say.
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(11-04-2016, 02:10 AM)kolemath Wrote: Say Something
I wrote a verse
then erased it.
Here it is.
Do you like it?
The silence? The purity of space?
The blather doesn't blah-blah
the space of what you say.
I kole! I really like this except that one line. I wouldn't try to define the empty space at all. I hate the word 'purity' in any context except in the chemistry lab.
It seems to be poking a little bit of fun at the self-centeredness of the reader. Of us all, really. 
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I think you may have accidentally used a line from my latest, note the similarities.
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(11-04-2016, 06:03 AM)ellajam Wrote: I think you may have accidentally used a line from my latest, note the similarities.
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sorry i know plagiarism isn't tolerated around here. i like your version better anyway.. 
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(11-04-2016, 03:55 AM)lizziep Wrote: (11-04-2016, 02:10 AM)kolemath Wrote: Say Something
I wrote a verse
then erased it.
Here it is.
Do you like it?
The silence? The purity of space?
The blather doesn't blah-blah
the space of what you say.
I kole! I really like this except that one line. I wouldn't try to define the empty space at all. I hate the word 'purity' in any context except in the chemistry lab.
It seems to be poking a little bit of fun at the self-centeredness of the reader. Of us all, really. thanks for the reply, lizziep! yeah purity is a bit heavy handed for post-medieval-virgin speak
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(11-04-2016, 02:10 AM)kolemath Wrote: Say Something
I wrote a verse
then erased it.
Here it is.
Also, I think it would be far funnier if the space was really, really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really[b], really, really, really, really, really big, so much so that the limits of posting are challenged. Would be kinda funnier.[/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b][/b]
Do you like it?
The silence? The purity of space? I agree with lizziep. Plus, it makes symmetry.
The blather doesn't blah-blah
the space of what you say.
And thus, horror vacui at work. Lovely!
(11-04-2016, 02:10 AM)kolemath Wrote: Say Something
I wrote a verse
then erased it.
Here it is.
Do you like it?
The silence? The purity of space?
The blather doesn't blah-blah
the space of what you say.
Does profound qualify as a crit?
Personally I don't give a shit.
Let's talk about me.
Shall we?
~Ton
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