Forward:

[Tiger the Lion]

remember love
we lose

another hour
Sunday

[ellajam]

awaiting
one more hour of light

coming home to you
with the night ahead

[Magpie]

Hi Paul,

I've been shuffling the lines in your poem and there are so many possibilities.
I like the way you've used the space so that 'another hour' stands alone; and could be seen as an extra hour.
I think the space also encourages the line shuffling that I mentioned. There's a lot in this poem for how short it is.

As an aside, nevermind lost an hour I thought I'd lost 2 weeks before I worked out that your clocks go forward earlier than ours.

Cheers for the read,

Mark