Great expectations

[Keith]

My girlfriend said her parents had gone out,
I checked my breath and drove off in a flash,
but on my way I started to have doubts,
I ‘d used up all the rubbers from my stash.

Chemist could you please just take my cash,
some durex maybe three hopefully four,
then off I sped the car was truly thrashed,
around the back sneaked in the open door.

Now the moral is I should have sent a scout,
because in I burst my body to the fore,
I’d stripped so quick my prowess out to flout,
her mum and dad with mouths upon the floor.

[faithlovedance22]

First line should either say texted or text said. Overall it's a bit wordy and it took a conscious effort to realize that it rhymed, good effort though

[Keith]

FLD22
Thanks for your comment I have made a small edit, good to know the rhymes are not that obvious, this one was from Leannes poetry workshops I cant remember the form but the rhyming follows it. Best Keith

[billy]

i think you're missing a few comma's
poor mum and dad

[Keith]

i think you're missing a few comma's
poor mum and dad

I tried to squeeze a few more in but they kept popping out.

[billy]

a point for smartness