Love Muse

[Erthona]

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Perspicacity emanates from her,
A vessel of most pure living crystal,
a sensual illuminati, sparking imagination
through a galvanic prism decree,
traveling to diversely-awing places;
she is the angelic love muse of me.

Ephemerally enlivening, she stirs the
Cosmic kismet in the poet's soul.
She bathes him in the springs of Helicon and Pieris 1
enigmatically energizing his natural predilection,
turning his desire of procreation into seeking
out those places where heaven touches terra:
silently stalking the soul of Being until it is
ensorcelled by the ipsissima verba of poets past.
She lies on his lap, purring her satisfaction.

1. The Pierides

[milo]

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Perspicacity emanates from her,
A vessel of most pure living crystal,
a sensual illuminati, sparking imagination
through a galvanic prism decree,
traveling to diversely-awing places;
she is the angelic love muse of me.

Ephemerally enlivening, she stirs the
Cosmic kismet in the poets soul.
She baths him in the springs of Helicon and Pieris 1
enigmatically energizing his natural predilection,
turning his desire of procreation into seeking
out those places where heaven touches terra:
silently stalking the soul of Being until it is
ensorcelled by the ipsissima verba of poets past.
She lies on his lap, purring her satisfaction.

1. The Pierides

Poet's
And bathes
And there is something grammatically crazy about "turning desire into seeking out those places"

[Erthona]

Thanks Milo,

"Poet's
And bathes"

She is bathing him in the spring of inspiration. "the springs of Helicon and Pieris"
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"And there is something grammatically crazy about "turning desire into seeking out those places" "

She converts his sexual drive into the drive to seek universal truth. "where heaven touches terra"


Dale

[milo]

Thanks Milo,

"Poet's
And bathes"

She is bathing him in the spring of inspiration. "the springs of Helicon and Pieris"
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"And there is something grammatically crazy about "turning desire into seeking out those places" "

She converts his sexual drive into the drive to seek universal truth. "where heaven touches terra"


Dale

Yah, on planet earth we spell it "bathes"

If you want to convert noun to noun you need to include "the" and "of", otherwise your magical muse converts nouns to participles an that just doesn't happen.

[Erthona]

Milo,

Sorry, just being dumb all week. Allergies or medication, whatever the reason I can't seem to think well, one reason I've cut back on critiques.

"bathes" good catch, changed
Poet's- changed
and the "noun to noun" I think I have resolved.

You'll have to let me know since I can't trust my thinking at the moment it seems.

Dale

[ellajam]

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Perspicacity emanates from her,
A vessel of most pure living crystal,
a sensual illuminati, sparking imagination
through a galvanic prism decree,
traveling to diversely-awing places;
she is the angelic love muse of me.

Ephemerally enlivening, she stirs the
Cosmic kismet in the poet's soul.
She bathes him in the springs of Helicon and Pieris 1
enigmatically energizing his natural predilection,
turning his desire of procreation into seeking
out those places where heaven touches terra:
silently stalking the soul of Being until it is
ensorcelled by the ipsissima verba of poets past.
She lies on his lap, purring her satisfaction.

1. The Pierides

Well, we've had fun, google and I. Your vocabulary is so far removed from mine (and I enjoy being sidetracked) that it takes a while. Some words are familiar but I check them to see if I've got it correct, and some don't even ring a distant bell (ipsissima verba).

So while I've enjoyed it I'm just starting to read it in earnest.

First, although I love the first line, when I read it aloud I get the faint odor of perspiration, maybe that will wear off.
Second, I'm curious, is your muse catlike or a cat?

I'm having a good time with this, thanks for posting it.

[Erthona]

Cella my cello,

"Second, I'm curious, is your muse catlike or a cat?"

Yes. But not really what one would call a house cat. Being a goddess, she can assume any form she chooses, when she is happy she becomes a purring pussy

Glad you are enjoying it, thanks,

Dale