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Selective Frugality

Selective Frugality
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#1
09-22-2013, 07:37 AM
Don't wanna spend money
On lunch and dinner, but
Pay for a bag
For your three grocery items
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09-23-2013, 10:41 PM
It feels a little wordy and telly. Maybe you could condense it some to make the message stand out stronger. JMHO.
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09-24-2013, 01:28 AM
(09-23-2013, 10:41 PM)Volaticus Wrote:  It feels a little wordy and telly. Maybe you could condense it some to make the message stand out stronger. JMHO.

Thanks, I'm trying to show rather than tell, but for this it is a little tricky for me to think of something that captures my message. And condensing probably would help, thanks for the feedback Smile
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09-24-2013, 07:29 AM
"your three groceries"

Doesn't make much sense.

"for your groceries" would be a correct usage, as there is not a singular usage. Any amount of food merchandise is groceries, the only singular would be if one listed each item by name.

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09-24-2013, 07:35 AM
(09-24-2013, 07:29 AM)Erthona Wrote:  "your three groceries"

Doesn't make much sense.

"for your groceries" would be a correct usage, as there is not a singular usage. Any amount of food merchandise is groceries, the only singular would be if one listed each item by name.

Dale

Thanks for help!
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