The Med is a graveyard.

[wasellajam]

Hi, James, welcome back! Please don't forget to leave some feedback for others.
You've got some great images here, some notes on my read:

I haven't posted, or indeed written anything, for a while, but this came to me unbidden today

All feedback welcome


The Med is a graveyard.



Crying underwater, salt mixes with the fresh,

an unholy alchemy, dissolving with the rest.

My body drifts

weighed down by the cloth I hold,

in my hands a funeral wreath,

a birthday suit, sodden, full of light.
Here I have a nude, dead body holding the wreath, a strong image. I'm lost on the "cloth" and how it's held.

The weeds, the sea-weeds
Now I see I have resolved L1 as "salt" being tears and "fresh" meaning lake or river incorrectly, we're in the sea. "Med" in the title is Mediterranean? Both sear and tears are salty, where is the fresh water?

caress my puckered skin

they wrap me in their bladderwrack adoration

Gently flagellating, parting like the sad

Magician’s curtains, to reveal a host,
"The weeds...curtains" a clear, interesting image, "bladderwrack" is new to me, thanks.

a flock of ragged tourists, floating just above the

grey, grey dance floor, dismal toes describing
Not a fan of the double grey or dismal toes.

arabesques through the silt of a thousand expeditions,
Lovely line.

clasping their dreams to their chests like children.
I'm not buying "like children", do they cherish their dreams while they're young?

Sometimes, just clasping,

their children.
I think these 3 lines could use a tweak, I could do without the comma after clasping.

Milk eyes stare in blank accusation

of my misremembered life
I'm taking milk eyes as children, these lines sitting well.

I never knew the sea, the sea

had so much hope and misery
hope and misery, ugh. Also, I'm not getting much hope anywhere in the poem.

buried deep down where

the salt and fresh collide.
Nice circle if I had made sense of the first line.

This poem was fun to read, I hope my notes help in some way, thanks for posting it.