Tattarrattat When I Vote

[Deor Ana Log]

Do I, like, look like I do?
madam, wow
split lips!
did ava repaper civil marram did
ere noon, mom
did ah a... reviver put-up “deified”?
Dammit, I’m mad
Dog, as a devil deified
lived as a god
Dammit, I’m mad
“deified”?
put-up reviver…
a ha did mom?
noon ere 
did marram; civil repaper?
Ava did split lips!
wow madam
Do I, like, look like I do?
*rise to vote sir*

[alonso ramoran]

Deor Ana Log,

This is a difficult piece to critique. It reads as complete nonsense, which, I understand, must be intended. What I can offer you so far in feedback is an interpretation. 

To me, it reads as the stream of consciousness of someone who is mentally unsound and is going to vote in some political election. The idea is ripe to contain with potential for social commentary, but nothing is really done with it, if that is the idea. I would argue even a mad person (your speaker refers to himself as mad) has some coherence of internal logic and I would think my readers at least deserve that much if the poem is choosing that kind of speaker. It also sounds like someone having a stroke.

Do I, like, look like I do? I have no idea
madam, wow Why do some sentences begin in lower case? 
split lips! Over my head; there's nothing else in the poem I can at least connect this to besides a repetition
did ava repaper civil marram did Marram? Madam? Mad? Mom? What?
ere noon, mom
did ah a... reviver put-up “deified”?
Dammit, I’m mad
Dog, as a devil deified
lived as a god deified... god... I'm trying...
Dammit, I’m mad
“deified”?
put-up reviver…
a ha did mom?
noon ere 
did marram; civil repaper? What is"repaper"?
Ava did split lips!
wow madam
Do I, like, look like I do?
*rise to vote sir*

There's an idea here somewhere, otherwise I'm not sure why you would choose to write it. I would try writing it out plainly, and see what sticks, examine where you would have room for metaphor, imagery, irony, etc.

[Magpie]

Do I, like, look like I do?
madam, wow
split lips!
did ava repaper civil marram did
ere noon, mom
did ah a... reviver put-up “deified”?
Dammit, I’m mad
Dog, as a devil deified
lived as a god
Dammit, I’m mad
“deified”?
put-up reviver…
a ha did mom?
noon ere 
did marram; civil repaper?
Ava did split lips!
wow madam
Do I, like, look like I do?
*rise to vote sir*

Palindrome poems are an interesting concept but practically impossible to execute without it sounding like nonsense, which can be good sometimes I suppose but on the whole it rarely works as a poem because it becomes too technical. I think calling it 'Palindrome' or something similar would help your reader.

I see you've made the whole poem as a palindrome as well as each line but in different ways. So sometimes the letters are the unit and sometimes the words are the unit and then as regards the whole poem, the lines become the unit. Very ambitious indeed.

'Dammit I'm mad' and 'dog as a devil, deified lived as a God' are famous palindromes in their own right so I'm not so sure if these should be used without reference.

If you wanted to use common palindromes to write the poem then there are lots of good ones kicking about, the trick is writing original ones. I tried to write a palindrome poem when I was a kid but I kind of cheated by using numbers like 2 and 4, sometimes as the pivot point.

Technically interesting. Cheers for the read.

some others that are well known -

do geese see god?
never odd or even
a man a plan a canal, Panama
A Santa lived as a Devil at NASA

and inspired by Napoleon, the famous "Able was I ere I saw Elba'