L. I. E.

[Magpie]

L. I. E.

L. I. E.      -- good title and the acronym makes sense

A drunk driver killed my father   -- strong image to start 
racing down the L. I. E., his body burst 
like a split seam, limbs littered the pavement.  -- do you need 'like'? would the metaphor be stronger. also if the body burst would 'organs' littering the pavement be more apt. Would 'asphalt' make more sense than 'pavement'. I thought you guys said 'sidewalk' anyway.


On a Saturday morning, after the bars quiet down to a desperate pool of sticky-spilt -- nice line and enjambment
drinks, vomit and hair gel, I can hit 80 after crossing the WhiteStone. I play chicken 
with the curbs, the gravel pings like buckshot off the chipped gloss-back fenders 
of my Audi. I want the courage to scrape the "twin-turbo" emblem against 
the guard rail, scar the doors but                       -- strong stanza with good images


a drunk driver killed my father speeding along the L. I. E., skipping across the median 
like a smooth, flat stone sent spinning across the flat glass of the pond at the cabin -- the graceful image of a skimming stone would seem to be at odds with the violent images portrayed above. Also, do you need 'flat' twice? 'glass' conveys flatness 
up on Brant Lake where he never taught me to fish. 


I like the Meth clinics on the island better. Island girls will spend hours talking 
in their low whisper drones about their daddies and their 18th birthday party 
with their long, flat blonde hair and their sunken eyes and their palm sized tits 
poking braless against their nightshirts. I don't need the escape like they do, 
don't need to explain how   -- not sure of the relevance of this stanza, I may be missing something but seems out of place with the rest of the poem


a drunk driver killed my father, speeding along the L. I. E. Leaving Manhattan 
for the weekend on a Saturday night, after the bars withered down 
to the desperate hustle. My father never would have driven drunk. -- I wouldn't get the twist here had I not read your explanation 

Good poem with strong images, just a few thoughts to consider.
Cheers for the read.