coincidence

[Roggen]

Distant connection,
Illusory closeness.

Against my will, 
I grow numb. 

Hints flickering slight-
of an infolding road.

Keeping my feelings away,
While our dim eyes won’t meet.    

Despite it —

You look more than jolly.
It still makes me feel sick, 
And yet content.

Some meaningless words, 
I can’t control this moment.

The loss passing through me.

You’re gone. 

I move. 

[milo]

Distant connection,
Illusory closeness.

Against my will, 
I grow numb. 

Hints flickering slight-
of an infolding road.

Keeping my feelings away,
While our dim eyes won’t meet.    

Despite it —

You look more than jolly.
It still makes me feel sick, 
And yet content.

Some meaningless words, 
I can’t control this moment.

The loss passing through me.

You’re gone. 

I move. 

So, I don't think I understand the need for the short lines with frequent breaks here.  A line should in most cases, represent a thought.  Much of it is rather abstract with not really a lot of imagery or metaphor.  It is fine enough for what it is.  Could you think of a way to speak to this metaphorically or using figurative language?  I think that would be nice.  This feels a little expository.

Thanks