grapefruit II

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grapefruit II

i pour sugar on grapefruit
i don't like the bitter taste I like the sparseness of the poem, but I feel you could do more showing than telling with "don't like".
the sweetness covers it up
but it's still there The "it"s in this stanza are missed opportunities to use visceral language and further characterize the bitter taste.

with every mouthful
i add more sugar
once isn't enough This seems a little redundant, maybe expand. How does it feel to be pouring the sugar? Do you eat grapefruit because you are hungry?
it's still bitter underneath

that's why i don't like grapefruit
so why do i still cling to you
open wide when offered This is great and cements the turn.
craving sucrose I like the word "sucrose" here. For me, the sound evokes a sense of bittersweetness.

your sweetness smothers
the hurt you gave me Hurt is depicted as something given, not eaten, so its hard to place where it fits in the flavor metaphor.
but the aftertaste
lingers

when you leave again
i'm left eating peel
mouth full of pith "Pith" is a great word here.
still wanting more

The key line in the poem: "so why do i still cling to you" kind of caught me off guard because it is buried under the "that's what i don't like grapefruit" line. If that was your intention, then well done. But if not, perhaps "i don't like grapefruit" could be the first line of the poem (or just cut entirely) and the line about clinging could open the third stanza, giving the reader a little space to breathe, if you will.