03-05-2025, 12:34 AM
This is a very good poem. I got the impression that this poem is about wanting to renew and improve yourself, but also knowing that it would be a messy thing to do and might release some new demons. I could be wrong, but either way this poem felt very relatable and raw. The only things I would suggest are a) replacing "its" with "it's" and b) adding a question mark after "Justify why my blood stains the land" so that the next stanza ties into it a little bit better. It's nice to see other teens writing on this website, and I congratulate you on a well-written poem!
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