Lamentations

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Lamentations




An empire collapses in not the turning of a page,              if referring to the death referenced below, maybe something besides "empire"/empire doesn't sound right to me
my life for a vanishing trick played to the tune of my heart strings protruding,   I'd suggest breaking this line up/"heart strings protruding" is hard to visualize; however I like the series of images that make up this line
a missing part of the puzzle replaced by soot upon the ground.   "missing part of the puzzle" I just don't get in relation to a death.
The world grieves the parting of someone dear
and so do I,
for as Jeremiah,
I am utterly destroyed.

“Let the mourners mourn til sundown.”
they sing
but the only ones who are there are the dead      but only the dead are there
for there is no one left to mourn along with me
because God will not allow it.  why does God not allow it?
“I am Ezekiel reborn.”
I chant
as I walk about the Earth,
naked like Isaiah,
for no clothing or thing to comfort me is left clinging to my body.

Let my place be there 
amongst those drowned out by the cries of the world.
Let me sink below and cover me in soil.
If there were words to describe this agony they would be written on my epitaph
but I cannot speak
and I cannot scream.
I am but dust and ashes
and this is how I shall remain,
my remains echoing a song of lament.  my favorite stanza, except I think line 4 could be cut

The Biblical allusions make this interesting to me, but I think something more about the person who has died would improve the poem.  If you are truly mourning an empire, then I am misreading the whole poem.