Unsleeping 1.) Edit

[Ducky]

There's a great sense of assonance running through the poem that's exciting to read and contributes to, what I thought was, a dreamlike atmosphere. At times the abstractness made it frustrating to follow, especially when trying to connect the stanzas and draw the theme out of it, though it definitely allowed for some awesome lines ("carbonated darkness" will probably bounce around my head while I'm trying to sleep).