08-12-2021, 09:50 PM
(08-12-2021, 01:09 PM)rowens Wrote: How old is this poem? Did you write it recently? Not one of your older ones?It's a very old poem (from the 80s) but significantly edited based on feedback on another forum. Everybody seems to like "hygienic peace". I'm glad it's straightforward. Straight forward is not one of my instincts. I posted it in Basic to blot out a previous poem that I was embarrassed about. Bare assed about. I think I post too many poems but I can't help myself.
The tone set in the first line sticks, and too much. It's that all the way through.
"I know, and anyway" tone.
Hygienic peace is the best statement.
The previous versions might be part of the poem. People are clever.
I was even more clever. I didn't read them.
Maybe you posted in this Basic section for a reason.
The poem seems pretty straight forward.

