Unregenerate Humanity -edit2

[Richard]

Hey Duke,
I appreciate how you rhymed here. I didn't even realized it rhymed until I was on my third reading of this poem, so nice work on that. I do have some thoughts:

Unregenerate Humanity


We learn that unlike rats’ or crows’
our adult neurons never split -When it says "adult neurons" it made me wonder about children. Do their neurons still split? The first three lines do a great job of catching the reader's attention.
to generate new cells:  mind grows
by forming new connections.  It -Is the repetition of "new" intentional?
relies not on rat-cleverness
to learn a maze, imprinting on
erupting all-forgetfulness, -Every time I read this, this line made me stop. Why is all-forgetfulness being described as "erupting"? I feel like you should consider using a different word.
but rules cemented from its dawn
of consciousness to solve each maze
and then to build them.  Minds are thus -I know you have a rhyme scheme here, but I wish there was a way to isolate "and then to build them". It's just such a wonderfully ominous line within the context of the poem.
conservative, each rat-like craze -The animal of the rat gets mentioned three times in the poem. I might be missing something, but why is a rat so important to warrant the repetition?
for novelty a heedless fuss.
In time, our aging neurons die–
more human, that, than multiply. -I love the last two lines. They sum up the poem, but also say something about the human condition (for lack of a better phrase).

We learn that unlike rats’ or crows’
our adult neurons never split
to generate new cells:  mind grows
by forming new connections.  It
relies not on rat-cleverness
to learn a maze - imprinting on
erupting all-forgetfulness -
but rules cemented from its dawn
of consciousness to solve each maze
and then to build them.  Mind is thus
conservative, each rat-like craze
for novelty a heedless fuss.
Eventually neurons die–
more human, that, than multiply.

Not sure what you'd call this - a curtailed sonnet, perhaps?  

Overall, my biggest suggestion would be reexamine some of your choices in repetition and decide whether or not you need them. I look forward to seeing where you take this piece from here.

Thanks for the read,
Richard