01-27-2018, 09:31 PM
Just saw the edits. I think "Seven o'clock sky", while sounding more exact, is actually more ambiguous than the original given time of year and location variations. Also lesser in sonics.
Two bits of workshop advice:
Don't ruin your poems by jumpimg to use the critiques, take time to think about them and keep your own voice when you choose to use them.
Also, the preferred way to post an edit is labeled above the the original. This way members can see the progression of a poem and sometimes send you back if the crit has led you astray.
Two bits of workshop advice:
Don't ruin your poems by jumpimg to use the critiques, take time to think about them and keep your own voice when you choose to use them.
Also, the preferred way to post an edit is labeled above the the original. This way members can see the progression of a poem and sometimes send you back if the crit has led you astray.
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