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Awake!
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11-30-2017, 09:55 AM
Awake!
I woke from vigour and a full tank— crashing in a squint. And dreams can be so mean in their terminal tactility, slinking away— our fingers trailing their backs. 
11-30-2017, 10:45 AM
i’m going to go out on a limb and say this is probably the best poem of the year. do we have a thing for that, because if so i want to nominate this one as pigpen poem of the year. it truly is a work of art. and it even looks like a work of art. it’s physical presence. it looks like it should be blown up and hung on the wall of an art gallery. it’s a thing of beauty in every respect. pure genius.
11-30-2017, 12:50 PM
Hey Tiger,
I quite like the sound and rhythm of this. I even read it out loud a few times just to hear it more than once. I also like the imagery with the dreams, and the last line leaves a huge impression on the reader. This is a strong piece. Nice work, Richard
Time is the best editor.
12-03-2017, 11:46 AM
(11-30-2017, 10:45 AM)shemthepenman Wrote: i’m going to go out on a limb and say this is probably the best poem of the year. do we have a thing for that, because if so i want to nominate this one as pigpen poem of the year. it truly is a work of art. and it even looks like a work of art. it’s physical presence. it looks like it should be blown up and hung on the wall of an art gallery. it’s a thing of beauty in every respect. pure genius.Agreed. 
12-04-2017, 12:59 AM
(11-30-2017, 09:55 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: Awake! I think God gives us dreams because He knows how we are struggling through life. He allows adventures where we can't get hurt and sends us friends when we are lonely. I love how He made that possible because He loves us and he knows our limits. Your poem brought tears, so I guess it is a very effective work. I'm hopeful you get lots of blessings today. -nibbed
there's always a better reason to love
01-28-2018, 03:57 PM
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