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Tiger the Lion Offline

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12-18-2017, 02:48 AM

Hello Janine. I see a few words you might consider cutting. Also, would prefer "needing" to "needin'" - just me.

(12-18-2017, 01:55 AM)nibbed Wrote: there's a cross-eyed girl
caught up in her own maelstrom
who is needin' prayer

Paul

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those who will (1st edit) - by nibbed - 12-18-2017, 01:55 AM

RE: for those who do - by Tiger the Lion - 12-18-2017, 02:48 AM

RE: for those who do - by nibbed - 12-18-2017, 07:02 AM

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