Matt's Story

[just mercedes]

His mother was asleep in the car—
red-cheeked as a painted doll.
Her eyes fixed on some distant
point beyond his shoulder. He turned
but saw nothing.
His Father unlocked the door,
and moved her head as if to pose her, but
his mother was asleep in the car.

I'm reading that Matt's mother committed suicide in the car. (the red cheeks, open eyes, and locked door)The lack of comprehension in the narrator's voice makes the fact all that much more chilling, as the reader realizes how this scene appears to a child.

Very effective, and affective, Todd. Not sure that father needs caps, as they're not used for mother.