race

[Rogo]

race
 
being an asshole
has nothing to do with the
color of your skin
 

It's not haiku —no contrast, temporal indicator, etc. Yeah, it follows the syllabic pattern, though that's not required for English haiku. It's also clearly stating an opinion — so senryu. 

The basic pacing of ideas/images is fine, but it reads as a flat statement. One of the aspects I appreciate about haiku and senryu is that they often exhibit interesting and dynamic syntax (often because of the em dash, brevity of form, etc). 

It's almost as if you quoted someone and set it to haiku's syllabic structure, which (come to think of it) sounds very interesting. In that light, it reminds me of conceptual/post-conceptual poetry's use of "found text." 


EDIT:

Thanks for the reads... I was being ironic with the form. As any have read me on the use of American haiku, I have always denigrated the idea. So just a little playing around.  

Oh...

In my defense, I try not to read previous critiques until I finish my own (so it doesn't influence my opinion). 

I'll keep the original part of my comment up if it's okay. The last part of it got me thinking.

Sorry about the confusion.