Funny Thing

[billy]

You're right, it does kind of lose it around the last few lines of the verse. I rewrote it many times, and now I see that it has become quite forced. Have to rewrite or ditch that part, I guess.

Your right that the poem itself sounds more Carrollian LOL, it's just the muse in my mind that was Seussian: goofy-looking (and goofy-acting) but harmless and full of heart. The silliness of Carroll is more macabre imo. But it's a very valid observation

yeah, carrol is a lot more evil as well lol.

personally i think a small edit would suffice.
just come back to it after a while and it'll show you what it wants doing