I am But a Man

[QDeathstar]

I've heard the title and refrain before. I feel like I am wasting time reading it again.

I am but a man,
do not let me see the monsters,
the ones who were left to rot.

stanza doesn't really make a lot of sense. The ones who were left to rot? which ones? what monsters? it doesn't really draw me into the poem. I'm kind of turned off.

I am but a man,
do not let the cold grasp of sorrow,
with its hands ever reaching into my heart,
reap my freedom and will like the crop of souls.

this image is better, cept for that old ratty refrain. I'd also suggest cutting ever from " hands ever reaching". it's awkward without reason.

I am but a man,
do not let me see the hatred,
those who have seen it with their lifeless eyes,
boring into mine with chisels and hammers,
sculptors of despair, with nothing to weep for.
again, not all terrible, sculptors of despair is nice. lifeless eyes is tired, on the other hand. I also think those is a poor word choice. Honestly the poem at this point is coming off bitter and judgmental. I think it would be a lot more impactful if it were witten self respectively. Eg, I am but I man, blind to my hatred


I am but a man,
do not let me feel Death,
his skull grinning as he devours,
taking those who have done all wrong,
those who have never seen the light of day,
consuming all, with nothing beyond his reach.
i think everyone is fine with death happening to those who have done wrong. I would rework this stanza on what man does not want to see, innocent death


I am but a man,
do not let me see the darkness,
do not let me lose the dying light,
I am but a man.
closing on three old cliches ain't the best way to end it

You've got some workable stuff here, but I'd try to block out what you heard before as I don't want to read it again.