Sometimes, a star is born
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I really like this one, love the sounds, I lke Sometimes, a dreamy word, the two hard "c"s followed by the two soft, Cyprian Cytherea's is such a fun thing to say. I love a good splat and it has the appropriate impact here. Heartbeat hies is a stopper, I would never say it but I love the sound and the way it makes the end fall. And I like it as a conclusion to the contradiction. A winner for me, thanks for the read.

(06-03-2016, 03:50 PM)Achebe Wrote:  Sometimes, a star is born

Sometimes, a star is born
clasping the cold blue firmament;
Cyprian Cytherea’s ornament
resplendently worn.
Sometimes, the sea wind flies
splat in the face of a logical man,
bespectacled orangoutan.
Sometimes, his heartbeat hies.
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Sometimes, a star is born - by Achebe - 06-03-2016, 03:50 PM
RE: Sometimes, a star is born - by ellajam - 06-03-2016, 08:33 PM
RE: Sometimes, a star is born - by RiverNotch - 06-04-2016, 08:17 PM
RE: Sometimes, a star is born - by Achebe - 06-04-2016, 08:23 PM
RE: Sometimes, a star is born - by RiverNotch - 06-04-2016, 08:31 PM
RE: Sometimes, a star is born - by ellajam - 06-04-2016, 09:08 PM
RE: Sometimes, a star is born - by Lizzie - 02-22-2017, 05:36 AM
RE: Sometimes, a star is born - by Achebe - 02-23-2017, 06:08 AM
RE: Sometimes, a star is born - by ellajam - 02-23-2017, 10:27 AM



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