06-03-2016, 08:33 PM
I really like this one, love the sounds, I lke Sometimes, a dreamy word, the two hard "c"s followed by the two soft, Cyprian Cytherea's is such a fun thing to say. I love a good splat and it has the appropriate impact here. Heartbeat hies is a stopper, I would never say it but I love the sound and the way it makes the end fall. And I like it as a conclusion to the contradiction. A winner for me, thanks for the read.
(06-03-2016, 03:50 PM)Achebe Wrote: Sometimes, a star is born
Sometimes, a star is born
clasping the cold blue firmament;
Cyprian Cytherea’s ornament
resplendently worn.
Sometimes, the sea wind flies
splat in the face of a logical man,
bespectacled orangoutan.
Sometimes, his heartbeat hies.
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