12-15-2011, 03:52 AM
pink apple blossoms
blown away with my straw hat--
i tether the goat
blown away with my straw hat--
i tether the goat
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12-15-2011, 03:52 AM
pink apple blossoms
blown away with my straw hat-- i tether the goat
02-17-2017, 02:50 PM
I think this is well done.
Nice subtlety with the seasonal element, and the blowing hat gives the scene motion. Title is accurate, but.....
02-17-2017, 03:28 PM
Good kigo, though the adjectives aren't traditional. (I guess you're going for traditional, with the syllable count and lack of a title.) Good shift of focus from close-up blossoms to hat blowing away; lovely final line leaves me to picture the untethered goat finding the hat and chewing it. Very nice, Billy.
02-17-2017, 09:59 PM
Referencing people.. ' hat' and 'i' makes this senryu?
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02-18-2017, 04:05 AM
dope poem. good combination of opposites. the image of the blossoms blowing away is age-old haiku jargon for the bittersweet feeling of change, but the image of the goat being tethered is so pragmatic and atypical--if you chased after your hat you'd risk losing something far more important.
What a funny hat! The bird bath covered in snow.
02-18-2017, 03:22 PM
cute!
I imagined the goat wanted at those blossoms! Much floated about in my head!
there's always a better reason to love
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