Mayfly (Revised)

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey Julius. This is a likable poem. I won't rehash what other's have said, but have one nit not yet mentioned. Below...

 

Mayfly

I watch you flutter in the mid-day sun
so innocent of how you came to be
so beautiful; a sight for any one
who has the time, and will, to stand and see
the rainbow colours in your fragile wings.
Then as you dart within warm beams of light,
it seems to me, the whole of nature sings
its song, and gently shares in my delight.

I know there was a time of cruelty
when you would kill in order to survive. I really don't like "in order to"
I understand, I know it had to be
in order that this pleasant day arrive. I like it less the 2nd time.
So have no guilt my pretty little one;
accept your day of life under the sun.

This is not a drive-by crit. I've read the piece a number of times and enjoy it. Thought the above observation might help.
Paul