Purgatory

[H[a/o]llowheart]

I think the idea of purgatory and an afterlife in general is a powerful, near-limitless bastion of creative art, despite its cliches. However, your poem is scant on detail and unique ideas, as has been stated by those above me. It's a dry, basic retelling of events, and not so much an emotional or enlightening journey. Perhaps focus more on the thoughts and ideas the main character is experiencing as he travels through the world beyond.

Also, it's strange how you say that you're "thrashed about", and THEN "hit on the head" and "thrown overboard." Thrashed about by who? The same person who hit you on the head? Why in that order? It's vague, and doesn't naturally lend itself to a mental image.

It definitely has plenty of room to grow. Good luck!