From The Tappan Zee

[kaxtar1]

FROM THE TAPPAN ZEE

It’s a dismal shot to that god damn city
you can hardly see her through the fog
and sometimes you don’t, or never do
it depends on how often you’ve crossed
but she looks like she stabs straight
out of the water
like she ascended with exhaust
she’s a siren with a cigarette
I know
‘cause I’ve crossed that bridge before
after a while, I quit looking to the side

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Very new and very short one. Looking to go further with it. As usual, beat it up.
Thanks.

Possibly my interpretation is completely off, but I like it enough that I'm going to believe mine over the correct answer.  This poem reads as a poem talking about a lover that he is about to have sex with again.  The poem seems incapable of being part of a city because the words do not characterize a city, they characterize a living, breathing, person.  I'm sure your intent wasn't this in the making of this poem but none the less, I genuinely loved it for my misconstrued interpretation. 

As things to potentially fix, check your pronouns.  "out of the water," This would be from the water if we are indeed referring to a city.  "she’s a siren with a cigarette" With?  Why not "She's a siren and a cigarette."  "And" would show the addictiveness of both and sounds fancier.  Again, "... I've crossed that bridge before," "This bridge", and then "that city."  We are to understand the author is on the bridge, "this" shows immediateness, whereas "that" shows a level of distance we aren't meant to feel.

Overall an intoxicating threading of words and a very picture-perfect image of perfection with just the right amount of deviation from the mundane.