A poem for a demon

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Thanks for your feedback!
These blanks are not actually meant for filling in but rather to make the poem build an image in your mind
i guess i kind of failed at that...

I tried to show the thoughts going through my mind and the constant struggle of keeping them together
so cliche is actually what my mind runs into a lot of the time i guess...

Any ideas on how to actually improve this?

what's another way to say fiery heavens? Put into plain words what you're trying to say. Then rewrite those words until they sound the way you want them to sound.