A poem for a demon

[brandontoh]

Thanks for your feedback!
These blanks are not actually meant for filling in but rather to make the poem build an image in your mind
i guess i kind of failed at that...

I tried to show the thoughts going through my mind and the constant struggle of keeping them together
so cliche is actually what my mind runs into a lot of the time i guess...

Any ideas on how to actually improve this?

Read more, write more. Cliche is something that you'll 'grow' out of as long as you keep exposing yourself to good writing.