A poem for a demon
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Thanks for your feedback!
These blanks are not actually meant for filling in but rather to make the poem build an image in your mind
i guess i kind of failed at that...

I tried to show the thoughts going through my mind and the constant struggle of keeping them together
so cliche is actually what my mind runs into a lot of the time i guess...

Any ideas on how to actually improve this?
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A poem for a demon - by 10BIT - 03-13-2015, 10:18 PM
RE: A poem for a demon - by Tiger the Lion - 03-13-2015, 11:38 PM
RE: A poem for a demon - by shemthepenman - 03-14-2015, 12:09 AM
RE: A poem for a demon - by first_high_of_the_day - 03-14-2015, 12:18 AM
RE: A poem for a demon - by 10BIT - 03-14-2015, 11:59 AM
RE: A poem for a demon - by first_high_of_the_day - 03-14-2015, 09:41 PM
RE: A poem for a demon - by shemthepenman - 03-14-2015, 09:49 PM
RE: A poem for a demon - by brandontoh - 03-14-2015, 12:53 PM
RE: A poem for a demon - by LorettaYoung - 03-16-2015, 11:44 PM



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