A poem for a demon

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey 10. I appreciate your attempt at originality here, but you have several obstacles to overcome.

Confusion, delusion, intrusion the chance of 3 successive rhymes that all ADD to your meaning is slim. Avoid sacrificing meaning for rhyme.
a shatterd... crystalline pearl
hazy shining, glimmer crazy! here you are asking a pearl to be " shattered, crystalline, hazy, shining and glimmer crazy. It's a whole world of contradictions.
mind in pieces... truly pure
_________and white as snow. __________ is not punctuation. It's graffiti all over your poem. "white as snow" is lazy cliche.
Fiery heavens burn my skin
A wolf in disguise_________
____________ O am I keen!
A shimmering diamond,
___________I am devils kin.

Welcome,
Paul