03-02-2015, 11:36 AM
I understand so much how you feel about alliteration. I abuse it so much myself because tongue twistings so fun, but my poetry is so rarely about fun so I lose out generally!
One thing that stuck out I thought I would mention..
Sweet singers perch on vantage points,
Ruffling plumage proud.
Silky syllables, meaningless,
"Unless they're hear aloud."
-Maybe supposed to be 'heard'? But then the other feeling is that everything is heard aloud?
One thing that stuck out I thought I would mention..
Sweet singers perch on vantage points,
Ruffling plumage proud.
Silky syllables, meaningless,
"Unless they're hear aloud."
-Maybe supposed to be 'heard'? But then the other feeling is that everything is heard aloud?