02-07-2015, 09:19 PM
Hi, monmac, welcome. 
I don't know if you're aiming at haiku or a short poem, but either way it's a bit wordy. Crystal, shaped and possibly smooth don't seem necessary. The image is fairly common, you may want to consider shuffling the lines for more pop.
Glad to have you here, hope you enjoy the site.
I don't know if you're aiming at haiku or a short poem, but either way it's a bit wordy. Crystal, shaped and possibly smooth don't seem necessary. The image is fairly common, you may want to consider shuffling the lines for more pop.
Glad to have you here, hope you enjoy the site.
(02-07-2015, 08:49 PM)monmac Wrote: Crystal clear water ripples
From a sun dried smooth shaped stone
Deftly skimmed across
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