From the frying pan into the fatty.

[mrmod]

in the main the poem feels like it works.
the last verse feels like an add on to end it.

it would be better if it was in the same easy feel as the rest of it.
it can be funny by all means dan.

nothing stops you changing the last line of the 2nd verse. for me it doesn't really work because of the bun. silly i know but i'm just being honest.

lets have a look at the last verse;

It's time to eat
And forget and be glad. two ands make it mmmm
For when you finish
The dishes await you, lad. if you say the last 4 lines out loud it doesn't sound right

how about;

it's time to eat
forget, be glad
then do the dishes
that's a good lad

that just one example.

So like this:

Pour the oil
Heat it up
Shake Swirl it around
the frying pan

Bacon goes first
Hear it sizzle
Perfect and crisp
Into the bun.
Heavenly smell. -> Is that maybe a bit better?

Rip open
The sausage pack
Fling'em in
And watch them swell

Break the egg
And splash it on
From clear to white
Sunny side up.

It's Time to eat
And Forget,and be glad.
For when you finish
The dishes await you, lad.
then do the dishes
that's a good lad. -> Hope you don't mind me stealing your lines . I couln't come up with something without it being too long or just sounding different