08-06-2014, 09:02 PM
Cute one Crow. 'Yonder' & 'and' seem like filler to yield a 5-7-5 syllable count. You don't really need to adhere to that strict scheme anymore with haiku/senyru. However, you could make a play on 'Milky' by dropping the 'and' & elongating the contraction 'he'll' to 'he will,' e.g.:
...Milk
he will have his Way.
By the way, your babe reminded me of Star-Child from 2001: A Space Odyssey.
Cheers/Chris
...Milk
he will have his Way.
By the way, your babe reminded me of Star-Child from 2001: A Space Odyssey.
Cheers/Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris