Preservation

[Brownlie]

Hello, Owl Eyes you've got quite an ominous name. Owl's were often used as symbols of death, or something.

I am hollow. --Too Abstract for my taste

I am untouched, dry of holy water.
I am the aggravated difference between half empty
And half full. -- I'm not sure I fully get this. Perhaps others will understand, or perhaps you're playing with meaning too flippantly.

The girl in the mirror will not make eye contact with me anymore.
Like a liar in the streets, I drag shame at my ankles.
She doesn’t know I’m here.
She doesn’t know I’m gone. -- I'm not sure about the anaphora. I have mainly read a lot of old poetry and never write free verse, but I think anaphora can work well after a series of strong verses to finish them off. The disassociation between the image and the speaker seems to point to a mental illness.


With the heart of a demented mathematician -- I'm not sure you need demented. You may even be able to say "As a mathematician."
I carve Roman numerals into Greek parchment skin. -- I'm not sure I get this, is it a reference?
My value is found in red-segment measurements,
In a shiver down the spine come out of hiding.
I never cared much for antiques. -- This seems to be deriding classical poetry where the sources were Greek and roman mythology.

I preserve a flawed skeleton
Within a dimension of clean cut glass.
When I gaze upon its beauty, they tell me they see broken bones.
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder -- Cliché that I would get rid of.
And I have gone blind.

I awake in bruises, scattered black and blue,
In the tiny broken vessels
I want to sail,
I want to drown.

This is not poetic.
This is not beautiful.
This is a delusion in the eyes of a mannequin
Searching for her bones.

This is not beautiful. -- Well, generally poems attempt to attain some sort of aesthetic. Even free verse can use tools to achieve a type of form in poetry.

Well, I left some comments that may or may not be helpful. You've got some interesting stuff, but I think you might want to check the site for some information on poetry. Thanks for posting.