edit #3 & 4 Claws of the Beast (a learning process)

edit #3 & 4 Claws of the Beast (a learning process)

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04-13-2014, 08:49 PM

I didn't notice it was an acrostic - your line 'from their sanctimonious' messes it up - the line should start with an I to make denial - you have DENFAL instead. what about 'In their sanctimonious tones' instead... just a suggestion.

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edit #3 & 4 Claws of the Beast (a learning process) - by Thoughtjotter - 04-13-2014, 10:35 AM

RE: edit #3 & 4 Claws of the Beast (a learning process) - by Mopkins - 04-13-2014, 05:26 PM

RE: edit #3 & 4 Claws of the Beast (a learning process) - by Thoughtjotter - 04-13-2014, 08:30 PM

RE: edit #3 & 4 Claws of the Beast (a learning process) - by Mopkins - 04-13-2014, 08:49 PM

RE: edit #3 & 4 Claws of the Beast (a learning process) - by Thoughtjotter - 04-13-2014, 11:32 PM

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