Monster (For a song)

[Burlesque3Rogue]

Hey everyone! These are lyrics for a song by my rock band. I need criticism as I am not and English-speaker. You can find its rhythm odd while reading, so here is the link to an mp3 file, where you can hear me singing it:

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Monster

Years went by as he
lead his steady
life
and never used to cry
in labour and prayer
But peace has faded
away as far
as only child had drown in
a lake,
as mother went insane
Strong faith
let get through

Winter came, so many candles were burnt
In a haze
In a grind
forced pain out
Despite nasty taste stayed inside,
alloyed their rage
with hoodoo
monster was born

He lost his faith then
lost his wife in
a fire
and emptiness inside
filled with real God
Rejuvenated man
fronts Lord,
throws out the body from its
hearse,
claims to resurrect
All in vain
From despair he runs away
To find his end

I'm afraid I can't listen to it however I'll do what I can for the lyrics(keeping the syllable count the same so that it still fits)

"His only child had drowned in
a lake,
as mother went insane"


I'm not entirely sure what

filled with real God
Rejuvenated man
fronts Lord,

Means, I think something got lost in translation. Maybe clear that up a little bit more.

Over all I think it has wonderful potential to be a really good song.

I hope to see more of it

Xx