No pity for the weak.

[Ryan_w_r]

Hi Ryan,

There is a pretty good vibe going with this, but sometimes I felt that your rhymes felt forced. Since this is in novice, I'll not do line-by-line, but I did want to note that the portion that reads 'The man whom I will put out of MY misery' does not (in my opinion) need the CAPS on 'my'. Allow the simple meaning to soak into the reader a little more slowly.

Thank you for sharing.

Thanks for reading and leaving a comment. To avoid it in the future what felt forced? Almost all of my writing has end rhymes (which I have come to find that "poets" on this forum strongly dislike) personally.. I think the rhyme makes sense... I'm not bending words.. Nor placing words just for the same of the rhyme. Also out of curiosity.. How do you feel about rhyme in poetry?