Fortune - First Edit

[tomoffing]

Impartial winds prop up the old and leaning
then turn their backs and blow them to the ground. Don't like then. I'd lose it
Sincerity or irony? Blind to meaning, the sincerity/irony thought is interesting, but vocally it doesn't flow well. Perhaps find a way to spit them?
nature neither fickle nor profound.

Torrential flood submits to desert drought,
warm island disappears in shifting sea,
some will suffer, others die for naught;
yet fate does not remember or foresee.

We walk oblivious in smug conceit, opening with oblivious flows better IMO. "Oblivious we walk"
though nature does not promise any day; this needs revision
surprised when troubles force us to retreat,
when what was solid suddenly gives way. Great line

We travel here on steeply inclined planes,
still struggling with imaginary reins. Love this closing, if I'm correct in imagining the incline downwards. The reins image is excellent too

As Rowens mentioned, the rhyme and rhythm is a little pushed, but a little tidying and this will be really strong. Great subject matter too.
Thanks a million