Fortune - First Edit
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The rhymes are forced here, but in a not so obvious way.

does not promise any day

is an example.

It doesn't run smoothly from line to line, your wording has it feeling stiff.
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Fortune - First Edit - by beaufort - 01-16-2014, 01:24 AM
RE: Fortune - by rowens - 01-16-2014, 02:16 AM
RE: Fortune - by beaufort - 01-16-2014, 02:56 AM
RE: Fortune - by tomoffing - 01-16-2014, 09:37 PM
RE: Fortune - by DonMar - 01-17-2014, 02:42 AM
RE: Fortune - by beaufort - 01-17-2014, 05:35 AM
RE: Fortune - by heslopian - 01-17-2014, 06:28 AM
RE: Fortune - First Edit - by beaufort - 01-17-2014, 10:48 AM



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