My Wheelchair
#6
Electric melting pain
Elated, the nerves boil
And with sustenance comfortably blanched
cooked, the food is ate

In this stanza you could perhaps change ate to eaten
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My Wheelchair - by SirBrendan - 10-18-2013, 11:02 PM
RE: My Wheelchair - by Todd - 10-19-2013, 12:48 AM
RE: My Wheelchair - by SirBrendan - 10-19-2013, 01:12 AM
RE: My Wheelchair - by billy - 10-19-2013, 07:46 AM
RE: My Wheelchair - by Todd - 10-19-2013, 10:29 AM
RE: My Wheelchair - by Saphi Topz - 10-19-2013, 10:33 AM
RE: My Wheelchair - by SirBrendan - 10-19-2013, 05:39 PM
RE: My Wheelchair - by jdeirmend - 10-20-2013, 07:44 PM
RE: My Wheelchair - by ellajam - 10-31-2013, 05:43 AM



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