Maybe Love

[Volaticus]

I can't stop feeling a tickling feel, Maybe another word than "feel"? "Feeling a... feel" sounds a bit odd to me.
when you come outta blistering cold
and come closer until your nose is pressed
against mine.

And I find it kinda funny when you flicker Is "And" needed? ("I find it kinda funny" made me think of the song "Mad World" by Tears for Fears.)
with your roe deer black, eyes.
And my wild instrument pressed against my chest And this "And"?
assists me with it's raw sound not to ever its
forget that look that you sometimes have; Is the second "that" needed?
when you're at peace.

Often, it makes me moody when you are melancholic,
but I'm always there.

Usually, I can't stop feeling that I'm falling in something
that I had forgotten about a great long time ago. Is "that" needed? It feels too much with the other "that" in the line above.

Now, your smile just makes me wake up at night, "just" in this and the next line. Maybe remove one of them.
just to dream about you while I'm awake.

Hi Sonata,

I think the first two stanzas have some nice images, the three last stanzas seemed a bit.. flat, in comparison. They also read a bit chunky/awkward, mostly S4.
I noted a few thoughts for you to consider. I hope it's of any help.

Best,
LB