06-14-2013, 02:31 AM
hey dummie.
are you reading me?
ha got ya.
Bunx,
Yes, jolly funny. Look, if you cannot compete through your poetry, please take up bungey jumping.
Punctuation,erratic and ill-informed. Vernacular inconsistent with the general theme of the piece. Syntax inexplicable in any adult/erudite piece of work.
Probably achieves its purpose but not significantly worthy of discussion...at least, judging by the content, not in any terms the author would understand.
Best,
tectak
Try harder...any more of this and you will be kept back after school. Please do not respond to this crit as I have heard it all before.
Note! This has been moved to serious workshopping to see if anyone thinks it is any more worthy than this mod. We shall see.
tectak
No.OK. Back to novice.
are you reading me?
ha got ya.
Bunx,
Yes, jolly funny. Look, if you cannot compete through your poetry, please take up bungey jumping.
Punctuation,erratic and ill-informed. Vernacular inconsistent with the general theme of the piece. Syntax inexplicable in any adult/erudite piece of work.
Probably achieves its purpose but not significantly worthy of discussion...at least, judging by the content, not in any terms the author would understand.
Best,
tectak
Try harder...any more of this and you will be kept back after school. Please do not respond to this crit as I have heard it all before.
Note! This has been moved to serious workshopping to see if anyone thinks it is any more worthy than this mod. We shall see.
tectak
No.OK. Back to novice.
Only one thing is impossible for God: To find any sense in any copyright law on the planet.
--mark twain
Bunx
--mark twain
Bunx